The Kiss (Preeti Bose)

The Kiss (Preeti Bose)

Aparna - what on earth is 'sprinkle your dew drops?'
Hope its not a euphemism for sex, which is what came to mind and spoiled the effect a bit :)

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Aparna - No, no shocked sensibilities, actually :-) I meant the exact opposite - that phrase "sprinkle your dewdrops" is too coy, which is what ruined the effect. Such phrases are more at home in old-fashioned novels.

The rest of the poem read well, its contemporary in its feeling. You could keep the thought, but word it in a contemporary way.

Cheers
Aparna