Tuesday, February 27, 2007

Found - First Grey Hair (poem - feedback requested (Sandhya Menon-Koottunkal)

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I kept thinking of the slang moonshine stands for - homemade liquor. I guess you meant moonbeam/moonlight. It gave me quite a different meaning :-)
"Ruffled layer of the night" -excellent. Goes with the moon analogy.
"Better. And the looks to go with it" somehow sounds awkward.

onward
Aparna