POEM: Tell me i see alright and it's only the rain (facts and calcuated conveniences)

is that dust from under her feet
on your shoulder?
is that the little girl
living
by the lies he told her?

continue...

'Is this music I hear
Or the silence in my head'

Amazing. It has the lyrical effect of a ghazal. A ghazal not just translated to English like many, but living in English.

"did you go easy on yourself;
was it really
so hard?"
Deep stuff.

You could use the "It's the rain that wont stop" refrain a couple more times, to break up the series of 'Is it/that' beginnings.

Last para has a spell fluff, 'too' spelled as 'to'.

Aparna